[ Exercise 4 ]
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Lacksonen
and Enscore(1993) modified the heuristics to solve the dynamic
layout problem. [
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EDITOR'S NOTE
In addition to switching to active
voice so that the intended meaning is more direct, this
sentence also turns a noun into a verb to save further space.
The following examples show how switching from passive to
active voice makes a sentence clearer:
Original
The optimization of multiple response problems in the Taguchi
method is achieved by the proposed procedure.
Revised
The proposed procedure optimizes multiple response problems
in the Taguchi method.
Original
Multiple response problems in the Taguchi method are optimized
by the proposed procedure.
Revised
The proposed procedure optimizes multiple response problems
in the Taguchi method.
Original
The multiple cases are different for each response.
Revised
Each response differs for the multiple cases.
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A
planning horizon minimizes total operating costs. [
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EDITOR'S NOTE
As shown in the original sentence,
some writers tend to overuse unnecessary phrases like "is
made", "is done", "is performed", "is conducted" "is undertaken"
and "is achieved". This often makes the sentence unnecessarily
long Omitting such phrases, turning the subject into a verb
and switching from passive voice makes this sentence much
easier to understand.
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This
section introduces the following notations to describe the
layout cost evaluation method. [ more
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EDITOR'S NOTE
However, passive voice is occasionally
preferred when the doer of the action is unknown or unimportant
(or less important than the action itself). Consider the
following example:
然而，有些情況卻要使用被動語氣，通常是行為者不明或是不重要時。請細想比較以下例句：
A
trackball is used to move the position of the cursor around
the screen.
In
this sentence, the person who is using the trackball is
unknown or unimportant, and definitely less important than
the action of moving the trackball. Therefore, in this instance,
passive voice is preferred.
在此句中，使用電腦軌跡球的人不知是誰也不重要，重點是球移動的這個事件，所以您知道在這情況下要使用被動語法。
Space
is needed to move a trackball.
Similar
to the above example, the person who needs space is unknown
or important, and definitely less important than the action
of needing space to move the trackball.
類似以上的例句，需要這個空間的人不知道是誰也並不重要，重點應放在移動球所需空間的這個事件上，故要使用被動語法。
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Computer
vision systems heavily emphasize that practitioners precisely
measure computer vision systems. [ more
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EDITOR'S NOTE
Switching from passive voice to active voice and turning
two nouns into verbs greatly simplifies this sentence.
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This
study numerically analyzes how inflation and deterioration
rates affect stock inventory. [ more
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The
proposed model can assist the manager in precisely determining
the order size. [ more >>>
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EDITOR'S NOTE
To increase word variety in a sentence,
the writer can use assist, facilitate, guide or direct instead
of always saying help.
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Experimental
results indicate that uncontrollable factors increase the
temperature. [ more >>>
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A
future study can extend the proposed model to incorporate
more realistic assumptions. [ more
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Kackar
and Phadke (1991) describe the three design types in more
detail. [ more >>>
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Users
with limited statistical training may have difficulty in
implementing the GRG algorithm. [ more
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The
website manager notifies the server that the account holder
must retrieve the data. [ more
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The
site manager must verify the data accuracy to ensure quality
control within a factory. [ more
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EDITOR'S NOTE
Depending on the sentence's context, verify, confirm and
demonstrate can be used as alternatives to check or prove.
Similarly, depending on the sentence's context, ensure and
assure can be used as alternatives to make sure.
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Advertising
markedly affects consumer preferences.Users generally choose
various options. [ more >>>
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EDITOR'S NOTE
To increase word variety in a sentence, markedly, significantly,
heavily, and substantially can be used as alternatives to
much, strongly and greatly.
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Users
generally choose various options. [ more
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The
instructor should provide textbook materials. [ more
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