A. Using the active voice
(a). Instead of
The proposed optimization method is demonstrated by numerical examples
to be a viable alternative.
Try
Numerical examples demonstrate that the proposed optimization method
is a viable alternative.
(b). Instead of
Large turning optimization problems can be solved by this algorithm.
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This algorithm can solve large turning optimization problems.
(c). Instead of
The quality of a machined part is dominated by the surface finish.
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The surface finish dominates the quality of a machined part.
(d). Instead of
The difference between the network's output and the target patterns
is significant.
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The network's output significantly differs from the target patterns.
or Try
The network's output and the target patterns significantly differ
from each other.
(e). Instead of
A summary of the corrected measurements using Procedure 4 is shown
in Table 4.
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Table 4 summarizes the corrected measurements using Procedure 4.
B. Simplifying your meaning
Instead of
Although computer vision systems have been successfully applied
to some inspection tasks, they are generally not considered as precise
measurement tools.
Try
Computer vision systems, although having been successfully applied
to some inspection tasks, are generally not considered precise measurement
tools.
Instead of
Since the production cost and quality of machined parts are significantly
affected by the machining parameters, it is essential to determine
the optimal machining parameters.
Try
Determining the optimal machining parameters is essential in the
machining process planning since the machining parameters significantly
affect production cost and quality of machined parts.
Instead of
The depth of finish cut (d) should be equal to the total depth of
cut (d).
Try
The depth of finish cut (d) should equal the total depth of cut
(d).
Instead of
The measurement errors of Angle 1 and Angle 2 ae reduced to 0.56
and 0.28, respectively. However, these errors are still too large
to satisfy industrial requirements.
Try
The measurement errors of Angle 1 and Angle 2, although reduced
to 0.56 and 0.28, respectively, are still too large to satisfy industrial
requirements
C. Avoiding unclear pronoun or demonstrative references.
Instead of
Since the computer vision system was first developed, it has been
successfully applied to automated inspection tasks in many industrial
processes.
Try
Since its development, the computer vision system has been successfully
applied to automated inspection tasks in many industrial processes.
Instead of
Although more data sets for network training generate better results,
they also take a longer time to learn.
Try
More data sets for network, although generating better results,
also take a longer time to learn.
D. Creating strong verbs
Instead of
The conventional methods are different in terms of reliability,
efficiency and sensitivity towards the initial solution.
Try
The conventional methods differ in terms of reliability, efficiency
and sensitivity toward the initial solution.
Instead of
Figure 4 shows an illustration of the circular turning.
Try
Figure 4 illustrates the circular turning.
Instead of
The turning operations are made of a roughing stage and a finishing
stage.
Try
The turning operations consist of a roughing stage and a finishing
stage.
Instead of
The task of precise measurement of those systems can be accomplished
using fine cameras and the proposed procedure.
Try
Those systems can be precisely measured using fine cameras and the
proposed procedure.
E. Avoiding needless redundancy and repetitiveness.
(a). Instead of
When an industrial part is brought into the computer vision system,
this part is scanned by a camera.
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An industrial part, once brought into the computer vision system,
is scanned by a camera.
or try
A camera scans an industrial part which is brought into the computer
vision system.
(b). Instead of
The training network shows little sign of improvement.
Try
The training network only slightly (negligibly) improves.
(c). Instead of
The purpose of this study is to present an effective correction
procedure.
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This study presents an effective correction procedure. |
