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A. Prevent overuse of traditional textbook
phrases.
(a). Instead of
Once can develop, expand, and debug the program easily in the future.
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The program can be easily developed, expanded, and debugged in the
future.
(b). Instead of
It is very difficult to find for sheet bending operations a suitable
deformation limit.
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Finding an adequate (appropriate) deformation limit for sheet bending
operations is quite difficult.
(c). Instead of
The main purpose of monitoring network planning is to decide suitable
well locations.
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Monitoring network planning attempts (aims) to determine appropriate
(adequate) well locations.
(d). Instead of
It is impossible to adopt extremely small grids.
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Extremely small grids cannot be adopted.
B. Make your intended
meaning more visually accessible.
Instead of
Because of an extremely short transfer time and high exposure sensitivity
of the camera, there was almost no interval as taking pictures of
moving objects.
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Almost no interval between photographing moving objects was allowed
owing to an extremely short transfer time and the camera's high
exposure sensitivity.
C. Avoid overemphasis of
clauses involving time.
Instead of
Currently, there are more than 50 varieties of bulk pharmaceuticals
produced in Taiwan.
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More than fifty varieties of bulk pharmaceuticals are produced in
Taiwan.
D. Avoid overemphasis
of clauses involving comparison.
Instead of
In comparison with the conventional method, the proposed method
spends less computational time.
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The proposed method spends less computational time than the conventional
method.
E. Avoid overemphasis of
"domains" which tend to push the author's intended meaning towards
the end of the sentence.
Domain of Purpose
Instead of
In order to determine the acoustic pressure due to an ultrasonic
transducer, we must solve the general equation.
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Determining the acoustic pressure requires (necessitates) solving
the general equation.
or try
The general equation must be solved to determine the acoustic pressure.
Domain of Reason
(a). Instead of
Because the macrocell is embedded in a cell, dowlink power
control is hard to formulate.
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Downlink power is difficult to formulate since the macrocell
is embedded in a cell.
or Try
The fact that the macrocell is embedded in a cell accounts
for why dowlink power control is difficult to formulate.
Domain of Condition
Instead of
If we wish to carry out environmental protection measures
that internalize the resulting social costs, we must consider using
market mechanisms to lead the people and industry.
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Implementing (Promulgating) environmental protection measures
that internalize the subsequent social costs hinges on effectively
using market mechanisms to direct individuals (the general public)
and industry.
Domain of Location
Instead of
In Article 18 of the Waste Treatment Law, it is stipulated
that. .
Try
Article 18 of the Waste Treatment Law stipulates that. .
.
F. Use transitions to link
sentences and promote the manuscript's flow.
Common sentence linkers include the
following:
Under those circumstances,
For such a reason,
In such a case,
In light of above developments,
As mentioned earlier,
As stated above,
If this above condition is satisfied,
In such an event,
According to those results,
As this figure depicts,
Above results suggest that. . .
This finding (event, fact, phenomenon, occurrence) reveals that.
. .
Provide variety in verb
form and word selection
(a). Instead of
gains much benefits
Try
possesses many merits
(b). Instead of
Our results fit very good with those of Wu et al.
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Our results closely correspond to (correlate well with) those of
Wu et al.
(c). Instead of
researching and understanding
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more thoroughly understanding
(d). Instead of
explanation briefing
Try
briefing
(e). Instead of
Recycling has to be practiced more.
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Recycling must be adhered to more stringently.
(f). Instead of
Companies see big results in cutting air pollution.
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Companies witness significant progress in alleviating air
pollution.
Avoid
exceessively long sentences.
(a). Instead of
Through numerous discussions by representatives from industry,
government, academic and research organizations, the "Inspection
Table for the Standard of God Manufacturing Practice on Pharmaceuticals"
suitable to local condition as well as acceptable to international
standards was drafted in July 1996.
Try
Through numerous discussions by representatives from industry,
government, academic and research organizations, the "Inspection
Table for the Standard of God Manufacturing Practice on Pharmaceuticals"
was drafted in July 1995. The document was deemed appropriate (adequate")
for local conditions as well as acceptable to international standards.
(b). Instead of
Since the climate on Orchid Island is relatively hot and
humid compared to Taiwan, the research team from the Research Institute
decided to return them to their native habitat on Orchid Island
to allow the butterflies to be successfully born.
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The climate on Orchid Island is hotter and more humid than
Taiwan, accounting for why the team from the Reserach Institute
decided to return the butterflies to their native habitat on Orchid
Island for their successful birth.
Avoid overuse of First Person
(a). Instead of
We must emphasize the development and introduction of technologies
that are both environmentally friendly and able to satisfy the needs
of humankind.
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Developing and introducing technologies that are both environmentally
friendly and able to satisfy the needs of humankind must be emphasized.
(b). Instead of
From the literature having been mentioned, we can find that
the factors which influence the impact pressure include impact velocity,
weight, bottom area and bottom edge.
Try
The above-mentioned literature indicates that the factors
influencing the impact pressure include impact velocity, weight,
bottom area and bottom edge.
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